0:12 - Very quick to jump in
0:25 - Sounds like something's lacking in the backing music
0:48 - Nice transition
1:04 - Cute build
1:28 - Getting the feeling it's not going to build more
1:43 - Corrected
1:53 - Still not there
2:15 - Grand
2:22 - Grander
2:32 - Needs to be sharper, the tone cuts out some of the backing. Little harsh, but just what the elf wanted to hear.
3:07 - Can hear extra beats creaping in, nice
3:22 - Nice ease off
3:33 - Like that
3:42 - Decent pattern forming
4:13 - New sound there is cool, but doesn't seem to continue for very long
4:39 - That one's in there for about the right amount of time
5:02 - Nice breakdown
5:16 - Hoping this explodes...
5:40 - Okay, building is good too
6:06 - Nice, building tension
6:16 - Drops back a little too much
6:26 - Brings it back nicely
7:07 - Wanted something more explosive to end on, but not bad
Much better than the first, you're certainly improving a great deal in a short period of time.